When I first printed my article, I wrote down all the paragraph number so that when I was writing my paper and I inserted a quote I could refer back to where I found it. Then I went through the article highlighting important information. Next, I underlined the most important information that was in the text. I then asked questions and made comments on the side of the article when I.had one. As I was reading I made name brackets around people names. Overall I thought that I did OK on annotating. I feel like in other articles I can do much better.
integrating with other reflection
When it comes to writing papers my ability to integrate with others is poor. Throughout the essay, I do add quotes and paraphrases but they lack meaning. As I am reading, I choose quotes that I believe I can make a connection to or is important to the writing prompt. After reading what is considered integrating with others, I came to the conclusion that I need to get better and to do that I can review my rubrics from last semester. When I was writing the essay reflecting on Kenji Yoshino “the new civil rights”, I used his quotes as a way to describe new words, bring in other peoples point of views, and to direct the conversation in another direction. As I wrote the essay, I used quotes from Yoshino and other people that we mentioned in the article but adding quotation marks. I would then either reflect on the quote by adding my ideas. And for definitions, I would use their definition in quotation marks and after I would describe the word in my own words and what I think the word meant. In this article, I did not pay attention to adding signal phrases and voice markers. I know that it is important. On my next essay, I will make sure to look at Habits of the Creative Mind and They Say/ I Say in order to improve my writing. Below I was going to add two examples of how I integrated with others. However, my essay got deleted so I was unable to. For my integrating with others I gave myself a NY. I gave myself this score because I believe that I added information from the text but I did not do as well as I could of.
Quotes:
One example that supports that is that if you’re a woman you need to wear makeup as it is an “essential” part of being a woman. He believes that “woman was given the liberty right to elaborate her own gender identity in ways that did not impinge on her job performance, she would be protected from demands to be either more ‘masculine’ or ‘feminine’.” (paragraph 32).
He defines it as “to tone down a disfavored identity to fit into the mainstream” (Preface).
Later in the article, Yoshino defines liberty paradigm as ” to protect the authentic self” and equality paradigm as “essentializing the identities it protects”.
Identity
Everyone has identities, some they are proud of and others they aren’t. Identities may represent who you are and where you come from. People hide their identities so they do not have to face social comments. Throughout history people have hid their identity so that they would not have gotten shamed, beaten, given less right and even murdered. Over a third of LGBTQ people hide their identity at work out of fear of discrimination.
Kenji Yoshino, an Asian American civil rights lawyer who is an open homosexual writes as article “The new Civil Rights”. He talks about how the law does not protect us from some things that are important. In his article he talks about covering. He defines it as “to tone down a disfavored identity to fit into the mainstream” (Preface). Many of those who know that the civil rights do not protect them cover themselves from who they really are. People use covering as a way to hide your sexuality, ethnicity when changing name, disabilities, etc. Many of those who cover their identity do it to avoid judgments and harmful comments.
In the article Yoshino mentions D.W. Winniscott, who explains what True self and False self are. True Self is the self that gives and individual the feeling of being real. When False Self is an individual the feeling of being unreal. One positive function of the false self gives is that one who is false to self is aware of their boundaries. Winnicott explains how “in the healthy individual, the False Self is reduced to a “polite and mannered social attitude,” a tool available to the fully realized True Self.” In my opinion I believe that your true self will help cover who your false self really is.
Later in the article Yoshino defines liberty paradigm as ” to protect the authentic self” and equality paradigm as “essentializing the identities it protects”. As he describes in the article that he believes that liberty paradigm will protect our true self. Liberty protects who we are and who we want to be. However, equality identifies us as what gender we are. One example that supports that is that if you’re a woman you need to wear makeup as it is an “essential” part of being a woman. He believes that “woman was given the liberty right to elaborate her own gender identity in ways that did not impinge on her job performance, she would be protected from demands to be either more ‘masculine’ or ‘feminine’.” (paragraph 32).
One group in society that has to hide their true self is those who are transgender. In the article, it does not talk about this, but it is something that people face a problem with every day. They have to hide who they are from the people around them to feel accepted. They use a way of ‘covering’ to hide from who they really are. Many of those who are transgender cannot get a job people will judge and stereotype them. I believe that no matter your gender identification or your sexuality, you should always have rights that support you.
nutshell draft
In the 1950s and 1960s, the Civil rights movement began. This law was put into place for blacks to gain equal rights under the law of the United states. In the United States, the Civil rights law has always been a problem. The civil rights law states “the rights of citizens to political and social freedom and equality. This law gives people the right to be free, equal and fair treatment in society. The civil rights may protect US citizens is many ways. However, it doesn’t not protect those that are importantly the same. It does not protect those who are homosexual and disabled. Th rights lean towards those who are black, when there is other things that are important that people should be protected by.
Kenji Yoshino, a homosexual civil rights lawyer writes as article on how the law does not protect us from some things that are important. In his article he talks about covering. He defines it as “to tone down a disfavored identity to fit into the mainstream” (Preface). Many of those who know that the civil rights do not protect them cover themselves from who they really are. People use covering as a way to hide your sexuality, ethnicity when changing name, disabilities, etc. Many of those who cover their identity do it to avoid judgments and harmful comments. In the article Yoshino mentions D.W. Winniscott, who explains what True self and False self are. True Self is the self that gives and individual the feeling of being real. When False Self is an individual the feeling of being unreal. One positive function of the false self gives is that one who is false to self is aware of their boundaries. Winnicott explains how “in the healthy individual, the False Self is reduced to a “polite and mannered social attitude,” a tool available to the fully realized True Self.”
Later in the article Yoshino defines liberty paradigm as ” to protect the authentic self” and equality paradigm as “essentializing the identities it protects”. As he describes in the article that he believes that liberty paradigm will protect our true self. Liberty protects who we are and who we want to be. However, equality identifies us as what gender we are. One example that supports that is that if you’re a woman you need to wear makeup as it is an “essential” part of being a woman. He believes that “woman was given the liberty right to elaborate her own gender identity in ways that did not impinge on her job performance, she would be protected from demands to be either more ‘masculine’ or ‘feminine’.” (paragraph 32).
One group in society that has to hide their true self is those who are transgender. In the article, it does not talk about this, but it is something that people face a problem with every day. They have to hide who they are from the people around them to feel accepted. They use a way of ‘covering’ to hide from who they really are. Many of those who are transgender cannot get a job people will judge and stereotype them. I believe that no matter your gender identification or your sexuality, you should always have rights that support you.
Essay Two Prewriting
In the article, Yoshino defines liberty paradigm as ” to protect the authentic self” and equality paradigm as “essentializing the identities it protects”. As he describes in the article that he believes that liberty paradigm will protect our true self. Liberty protects who we are and who we want to be. However, equality identifies us as what gender we are. One example that supports that is that if you’re a woman you need to wear makeup as it is an “essential” part of being a woman. He believes that “woman was given the liberty right to elaborate her own gender identity in ways that did not impinge on her job performance, she would be protected from demands to be either more ‘masculine’ or ‘feminine’.” (paragraph 32).
One group in society that has to hide their true self is those who are transgender. In the article, it does not talk about this but it is something that people face a problem with every day. They have to hide who they are from the people around them to feel accepted. They use a way of ‘covering’ to hide from who they really are. Many of those who are transgender cannot get a job people will judge and stereotype them. I believe that no matter your gender identification or your sexuality, you should always have rights that support you.
Essay Two Prewriting
January 29, 2019
Kenji Yoshino defines covering as “to tone down a disfavored identity to fit into the mainstream,”. Yoshino covers himself as he is a gay civil right lawyer. He believes that he needs to hide that his sexuality because of his job. Everyone covers no matter their circumstances. Yoshino gives examples of what people cover, they are: covering ethnicity when changing the name, your sexuality, covering disabilities, etc. From what I have read, I have conducted my own definition of covering. Covering when a person hides something about them from the community to avoid harmful judgments and comments. One example that I can relate to covering is if someone was transgender. They would hide it from everyone around them. Yoshino and my definition of covering are different and the same. He connects covering to fit into the mainstream. I connect it to fitting into the community. Those two are connected in many ways.
In the article D.W. Winnicott, explains what True and False Self is. He talks about how they are connected in many ways. True Self is the self that gives an individual the feeling of being real and False Self is the self that gives an individual the feeling of being unreal. One positive function of the false self is that one who is false to self is aware of their boundaries. Winnicott explains how “in the healthy individual, the False Self is reduced to a “polite and mannered social attitude,” a tool available to the fully realized True Self.”
A Toast Story Prewriting
In A Toast Story, the author talks about many different cafes in the San Fransico area that serve fancy toast. He visited one cafe called Trouble. After his visit, he decided to meet the owner, Giulietta Carrelli. She talked about how growing up she was raised in an immigrant family. Her father was a tailor from Italy and her mother was an ex-nun. This identifies her as Italian and someone who grew up in an immigrant family. After Carrelli talked to the author about the cafe and why it is the way it is she then made her way into talking about her life and how the cafe came to be. Carrelli talked about however since high school she has had schizoaffective disorder. This has caused her many ups and downs throughout her life. This plays a part in identity. She identifies as having this disorder because it affects who she is. She then began to talk about how she was homeless and jobless. These two things identify her too. She would get identified into two categorized, which are homeless and unemployed. As the article goes on talking about Trouble and Carrelli’s life, they pointed out many different things that identify her. As I was reading some quotes stuck out to me and explained why she set up her cafe as she did. Trouble is set up so that there is no seating and many of the customers gather outside of the storefront to enjoy their coffee and toast. She explained that she set this up as a “sociological experiment in engineering spontaneous communication between strangers”(paragraph 24). She wants her customers to communicate with each other even if they do not know each other. At her cafe, she sells coconuts to her customers. When I read this I was very interested to learn why this is. Later on, as I was reading she explained ” I did a study in New York and San Franciso, standing on the same street corner holding a sandwich, saying hello to people. no one would talk to me. But id I was standing on the same street corner and I was holding a coconut? People would engage”(Paragraph 24). This shows that when people are next to strangers they may not engage with them unless they are doing or have something that is unique.
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The Story of My Name
When people ask me what my name is and I say Alivia with an A they always say “that is so pretty”. Some people even ask “how did your parents pick that name?”. Before I was born, my mom was dedicated to naming me, Mackenzie. She loved that name however when my mom was in labor, my aunt brought up the name Alivia. She said she thought it was very pretty and when you pronouce Olivia, you pronouce the O as an A. By the time I was born my mom ended up loving the name. My name has no real meaning to my family. However, my name middle name is what is meaningful. My middle name is Jean, which is also my great-grandmothers name, my grandmother’s middle name, my aunt’s middle name, and my middle name. My aunt who got married into the family moms first name is Jean. so that means that my aunt’s middle name and my cousin’s middle name too is Jean. Someday when I have a daughter, I will have her middle name Jean so that I can keep it in the family and I hope that she will do the same. Back to the name Alivia, from that my friends and family mostly call me Liv or Livvy. I liked having nicknames because it means that the person who calls me has a close relationship with me. My name means more to me than others. I like it because and is unique. Many people do not have the same name as me. Never have I ever thought that I wanted a different name because it means to me. Names are more than just a name, it identifies and defines you as a person.
Post Conference 2
Alivia Shattuck
November 2, 2018
Post Conference 2
Positive Feedback:
When I am writing, I am able to make connections to the reading. I reveal assumptions that the writer may have. I also bring in background information to support my quotes that I take from the writing. When it comes time to edit my papers, I go beyond the comments to make my paper stronger. While I am reading, I am able to connection the writing ideas to my own. I am able to keep a running summary of the writer’s thoughts as I annotate the writing. I also record the writer’s response and ask questions.
How am I going to get better:
I am planning on give key concept or ideas, bring new perspectives, shift the direction, and provide arguments to my writing. I am also planning on adding two more annotations on every page of my reading to make my way to advanced annotation, that can be found on my reading process rubric. When I am having a difficult time, or I am confused, I will ask Megan and Eric for help. I will also keep my portfolio updated and have consistent work and belief in myself.
Answer Map
October 16, 2018
The highlighted ones are mine.
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