Category: ENG 123

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Let’s write

October 19, 2018

As I wrote my essay, I did not quite understand what my professor meant by the ending question. after I talked to him, he explained to me what it was about. If I were to add a question into my writing now I would say, “why do teachers actually have lower expectations for children who are overweight?”. This question can not be fully answered but there is an answer for it. As a future educator, I find it fathoming that teachers can actually treat a child differently due to their weight. That not only hurts the child but it also lowers their self esteem. My audience many be educators or future educators. However anyone may be interested because all of us were in a classroom and would be hurt if we saw this with our own two eyes.

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Writing to a question

October 18, 2018

 

Alivia Shattuck

October 17, 2018

Eng. 133

 

 

 

As I read the article, XXXL: Why are we so fat? There were many things that I found interesting and surprising. This article can be seen as informational or controversial. The journalist, Elizabeth Kolbert, explains how America is one of the leading countries, obesity wise and why that is. She goes into detail on how and why our country is overweight. She explains the many different views, in order to help find an answer to why we are so fat? You can ask this question to anyone and they will all have a different answer.

 

I couldn’t help myself but having my own opinion to what Kolbert had to say as I kept on reading. One thing that David A. Kessler said that drew my attention was “Conditioned hyper eating works the same way another ‘stimulus response’ disorders in which reward is involved, such as compulsive gambling and substance abuse” (paragraph 15). This interested me because I did not know that food is as addictive as substance abuse. He also said, “brains react to sweet, fatty foods the same way that addicts’ respond to cocaine” (paragraph15). I do not understand what addictive chemicals are both food and cocaine, but I am intrigued to learn more. People who are overweight tend to eat more and this is where the addictive chemical plays into place.

 

Over the past decades, companies have risen the calories in their food. A small fry at McDonalds used to be two hundred calories. Today, a small fry is two hundred and thirty calories and a large fry is five hundred calories. As Kolbert states, “During the nineteen-eighties the amount of food that was counted as a single serving increased rapidly” (paragraph 23). That statement has a correlation to the increase of human weight. As people eat more, the more weight they gain.  Kolbert also says that “the bagels that Americans eat have in the past twenty years swelled from a hundred and forty to three hundred and fifty calories” (paragraph 23). After she said this, I was surprised because I eat a bagel almost every day.

While I was reading the article, I came across something that that worried me as a future educator. She explained how “three out of five of the heaviest kids have been teased at school” (paragraph 27). This statement really did hurt me. Children, no matter their size should never be judged. Then she went on to talk about how “Teachers consistently hold lower expectations of overweight children…..” (paragraph 27). Teachers in a classroom should never have expectations on children no matter their weight, race, gender or even their financial background. This conversation really did fight with my thoughts. I am having a hard time processing why this would even happen.

As you look throughout the United States you can see that people who are overweight tend to get rude things said to them or they are starred at. This is because we have a “size bias” (paragraph 28). In the U.S., it is seen okay to be skinny or underweight but when someone is overweight they are hated on. When people think of the heaviest country, they think of America. Francis Delpeuch, Bernard Maire, Emmanuel Monnier, and Michelle Holdsworth states how “Americans were the first to fatten up, they no longer lead the pack” (paragraph 30). As of current data, it reveals that Finland, Malta, Slovakia, Germany, Greece, the Czech Republic and Cyprus all have a higher proportion of overweight adults than America. This astonished me because I have always been taught that America is the fattest country.

When you go to the grocery store and you look at the shelves you can see that the unhealthy foods are always less expensive than the healthy things. With over 29% of adults in the United States being classified as lower class, some of the families do not have enough money to buy food. In that case, they tend to buy unhealthy food because it is less expensive. In the past few decades, fattening foods have become cheaper. In the book “Fattening America”, Eric Finklestein talks about how between “1983 and 2005, the real cost of fats and oils have decreased sixteen percent” (paragraph 12). There is a big correlation between consumption and cost. When people buy unhealthy food, they tend to be less expensive and come with more food. With the prices in food decreasing, children in schools being bullied, calories getting higher and many more. All of these examples are to help explain the question of “Why are we so fat?”

 

As I read this article, I thought of the ways that writer began and ended the argument. She began by starting the conversation with a question, “why are we so fat?”. As she kept writing and gathering information, she would ask smaller questions through the article. As she read other books and talked to people, she found out that there are many different answers to her question. Finding the real and exact answer to her question is going to difficult but know people know that sometimes you may not be able to get one answer out of a question.

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Podcasts

October 15, 2018

Alivia Shattuck

October 14, 2018

Eng. 122

 

 

 

While I was listening to the podcasts “An Equation for Good” and “Secrets of Success”, I took notes on all the questions that were asked throughout the podcast. The speaker would ask many main questions and add little question off of it in order to find an answer. When you are trying to find answer to something you ask the big question and then smaller ones. One example would be “what restaurant do you want to go to?” that would be the big question and the little ones would be “what kind of food do you want?” or “what kind of atmosphere?”. In order for a human to answer one questions, they need some supporting information and to get that they may ask you more questions. In the podcast “An Equation for Good”, they ask the big question “how can we explain why people go out of their way to help a stranger?” and in “Secrets of Success”, they ask the question “is there a secret to success?”. Both of these questions are open-ended questions. An open-ended question cannot be answered with “yes” or “no”. These questions require more thought. In these podcasts, I thought listened to how many open-ended questions they asked. They would ask one big open-ended questions and add little ones off of it. When it comes to open-ended questions, you could never stop talking. If you were in a group of people and no one was talking, say an open-ended question like “How do I go about with purchasing a home?”. People will put their own input in and they also many ask other smaller questions like “where are you looking for a home?”, “what kind of home?” or “Who is you real-estate agent?”. Each of these questions bring back to the main question. They each have a purpose in finding their wat back to the main topic. I NEED HELP ON THIS….

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Post Conference 1

Alivia Shattuck

Post conference 1

September 27, 2018

 

Positive feedback:

 

Writing process- When It came down to writing, I had many positive feedbacks. I was able to think of ideas and put them down on the page.  When my partner gave me feedback on my writing I then went beyond and improved my writing in other ways. Throughout my essay, I revised it to support, aim, develop, and elaborate on new ideas. I connected new ideas using complete sentence structures.

 

Integrating ideas and academic conversions-was able to use signal words what were found in the book they say/ I say chapter 3. When introducing a quote, I used voice markers to tell what person was talking. I was also able to embed words from other into my sentences.

 

Reading Process- I was able to improve my writing understanding of the writing description. I made many connections between the text and self, world and other texts.

 

Engagement- I am just beginning of changing my old process of writing and embrace new ones. In class, I have been prepared, actively engaged and accepting feedback from others. When it comes to in class and homework, I have been a productive learner. I was worked side-by-side with my classmates in order to solve a problem or ask questions when I need them. I help provide my classmates with constructive feedback on their writing.

 

Constructive critical feedback:

 

Writing process- I need to work on using my revisions as an essential part of my writing. I have not been able to add complex and game-changing ideas. I need to use voice-clusters and clarity to my sentences. I really need to work on is my grammar corrections and make sure that the text meets the formation.

 

Integrating ideas and academic conversions- I need to use my margin comments to edit my writing and make it stronger. I have a lack of context introductions in my paragraphs. I need to work on borrow sentences and apply them to my writing to make them stronger and reflect on them. I need to cite my sources at the end of my writing.

 

Reading Process- I need to use some examples on the paper to advance my writing. When underlining in the book, I need to make correlations, ask questions and explain in the margin.

 

Engagement- I need to use each activity as an important part of my learning. When in class, I need to be a class leader.

 

 

How am I going to get better:

I am planning on making three annotations on every page of my reading starting with annotation fundamentals working my way to advanced annotation, that can be found on my reading process rubric. When writing informal papers, I will read my writing process rubric and use one example from each of the writing stages. For every quote that I use on a paper, ask myself if it connects to the topic of the writing and how. For two or three quotes per page, use two different ways to use a quote (spotlight, explain, translate, analyze, interpret, apply, build on, question, complicate, criticize, and/or reject) that is found In my integrating ideas and academic conventions rubric.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Alivia Shattuck

Post conference 1

September 27, 2018

 

Positive feedback:

 

Writing process- When It came down to writing, I had many positive feedbacks. I was able to think of ideas and put them down on the page.  When my partner gave me feedback on my writing I then went beyond and improved my writing in other ways. Throughout my essay, I revised it to support, aim, develop, and elaborate on new ideas. I connected new ideas using complete sentence structures.

 

Integrating ideas and academic conversions-was able to use signal words what were found in the book they say/ I say chapter 3. When introducing a quote, I used voice markers to tell what person was talking. I was also able to embed words from other into my sentences.

 

Reading Process- I was able to improve my writing understanding of the writing description. I made many connections between the text and self, world and other texts.

 

Engagement- I am just beginning of changing my old process of writing and embrace new ones. In class, I have been prepared, actively engaged and accepting feedback from others. When it comes to in class and homework, I have been a productive learner. I was worked side-by-side with my classmates in order to solve a problem or ask questions when I need them. I help provide my classmates with constructive feedback on their writing.

 

Constructive critical feedback:

 

Writing process- I need to work on using my revisions as an essential part of my writing. I have not been able to add complex and game-changing ideas. I need to use voice-clusters and clarity to my sentences. I really need to work on is my grammar corrections and make sure that the text meets the formation.

 

Integrating ideas and academic conversions- I need to use my margin comments to edit my writing and make it stronger. I have a lack of context introductions in my paragraphs. I need to work on borrow sentences and apply them to my writing to make them stronger and reflect on them. I need to cite my sources at the end of my writing.

 

Reading Process- I need to use some examples on the paper to advance my writing. When underlining in the book, I need to make correlations, ask questions and explain in the margin.

 

Engagement- I need to use each activity as an important part of my learning. When in class, I need to be a class leader.

 

How am I going to get better:

With the help of these papers and my past writing, I will use these as a key when writing new papers. I will see what I need to do more of, how to advance my writing and what I did well on to continue that.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Re. An Animal’s Place

 

September 21, 2018

Alivia Shattuck

September 14, 2018

English 122

 

As Michael Pollan sits in a restaurant eating a rib-eye steak, he reads Peter Singer’s Animal Liberation. Animal Liberation exposed the realities of today’s factory farms and product-testing. He advocates his readers to make a movement to transform their attitudes towards animals and climate the cruelty we inflict on them.  As Pollan reads the book, he contradicts himself. He thinks of the ways that he knows animals are killed and tested but in reality he does not know the truth. In the book, Singer Argues that people should stop eating meat because of the way that the animals are killed. He used many allies inorder to find the truth behind the cruelty of animals.

One aspect that drew my attention was, “animals on factory farms”. As singer claims, “Animals feel the need to exercise, stretch their limbs or wings, groom themselves and turn around, whether or not they have ever lived in conditions that permit this.” I agree with this quote because animals are naturally built to be able to run in a field or fly in the sky. As I know from my prior knowledge, animal farm factories are places where animals are kept in tight corridors, fed non-natural foods, and not healthy. By keeping them under a roof and lack of room they become very sick and unhappy. They are then eventually killed by torture in order to provide customers with meat supply.

Pollan says “The measure of their suffering is not prior experiences but the unremitting daily frustration of their instincts”. This supports to what I said about the animals not being able to run around in a field or fly in the sky. Pollen next goes on to talking about how animals are getting used to have lotions, creams, washes etc. tested on them. He writes “In the case of animals testing, all but the most radical animal rightists are willing to balance the human benefit against the cost to the animals”. This sentence made me very frustrated because companies are using harmful substances on animals just to see how they will react to human skin. Which is hurting the animal.

One other thing that caught my interest was when pollen met with Joel Salatin, owner of Polyfacefarm. He went on to tell Pollan how he only eats meat that he kills himself. Before Saltatin kills his animals they are treated with respect and then had a peaceful death. Many farm animals live a “characteristic form of life” before they are killed. For example, animal are able to express their natural instincts without being locked up in a concrete building not being able to move. One thing that Pollan has influenced me on is by saying “For my own part, I’ve discovered that if you’re willing to make the effort, it’s entirely possible to limit the meat you eat to nonindustrial animals.” I agree with this idea because it lets the animals be able to live life “normally”. Myself as a meat eater will be able to eat meat and still know the animal was able to live a “normal” life. If you do not want to give up eating meat, then you have to think about if the animal had lived a “lifetime of suffering” or a “normal” life. When it comes down to eating meat many people are very skeptical on what meat they should or shouldn’t eat. In my opinion, you should get meat from a local farm to ensure that the animal had lived a life of non-suffering. When it comes to the way animals are killed, you really need to think to yourself. “Is this worth eating?” or “how was this animal killed?”. As of today, the way animals are killed is cruel and evil to do to an animal. We may think that they are just an animal and they have no feelings but in reality, they are still treated in a bad way.

 

 

 

Alivia Shattuck

September 14, 2018

English 122

 

Michael Pollan makes very good points in his article “An Animal’s Place”. As he sits in a restaurant eating a rib-eye steak he reads Peter Singer’s Animal Liberation. Animal Liberation is a book describing how eating, wearing, experimenting and killing animals is cruel. The book tries to persuade you into changing your ways of eating meat. As Pollan reads the story, he thinks of many aspects on why eating animals is bad. One aspect that drew my attention was “animals on factory farms”. As singer states, “Animals feel the need to exercise, stretch their limbs or wings, groom themselves and turn around, whether or not they have ever lived in conditions that permit this.” As I know from my prior knowledge, animal farm factories are places where animals are kept in tight corridors, fed non-natural foods, and not healthy. Animals are meant to be able to run around in an open field or be able to express themselves. By keeping them under a roof and lack of room they become very sick and unhappy. They are then eventually killed by torture in order to provide customers with meat supply. Pollan says “The measure of their suffering is not prior experiences but the unremitting daily frustration of their instincts”. This goes back to what I said about the animals not being able to run around in a field or fly in the sky. Pollen then goes on to talking about how animals are getting used to have lotions, creams, washes etc. tested on them. He writes “In the case of animals testing, all but the most radical animal rightists are willing to balance the human benefit against the cost to the animals”. This sentence made me very frustrated because companies are using harmful substances on animals just to see how they will react to human skin. Which is hurting the animal. One thing that really drew my attention was when pollen emet with Joel Salatin, owner of Polyface farm. He went on to tell Pollan how he only eats meat that he kills himself. Before the animals are killed they are treated with respect and had a peaceful death. Many farm animals live a “characteristic form of life” before they are killed. This lets the animal be able to express their natural instincts without being locked up in an concrete building not being able to move. One thing Pollan has influenced me by is saying “For my own part, i’ve discovered that if you’re willing to make the effort, it’s entirely possible to limit the meat you eat to nonindustrial animals.” I liked this idea because it lets the animal be able to live life like an animal and myself as a meat eater will be able to eat meat and still know the animal was able to live a normal life. If you do not want to give up meat then you have to think able if the animal has lived a “lifetime of suffering” or a nice natural life. When it comes down to eating meat many people are very sceptical on what meat they should or shouldn’t eat. In my opinion, you should get meat from a local farm to ensure that the animal has lived a life of not suffering.

 

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September 12, 2018

Guest speaker reflection

Alivia Shattuck

September 10, 2018

Eng 122

Guest Speaker Reflection

 

Today, September 10, 2018, a guest speaker came into our class. Our guest speaker was Wes, a sophomore study in exercise science. He talked about how this class may be hard at first but after a while and listening to the professors comment you can grow as a student. He said that we do get a lot of homework but in the end it is rewarding. One thing that I will take to heart is that, if you try your hardest in the class and succeed. He also made a comment about how if you need help to just email my professor or ask him for help. I will use this to the best of my capability. One thing he said that surprised me was that he did not do many of the assignment and still passed the class. I will not listen to this but I was however surprised. When you enter college, you look up to the upperclassman for advice because college is very different than high school.  The transition from highschool to college for me has been very difficult. In highschool, I did not have any homework and now in college I have a lot of homework each night. I am going to listen to Wes’s advice to be able to succeed in English 122.

 

 

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