Essay 4 Prewriting pt. 1

The article explains how the United States has a smaller amount of mixed marriages than Hawaii does. Since people began settling in Hawaii, the “high rate of intermarriage here, ethnic and racial tensions haven’t really disappeared.”(Page 252). However, they have changed.  My understanding of this is that people who are with different ancestors move to Hawaii and begin their life there. As they get married and have a family, they create more inter-racial families.

Research has shown that a collection of genetic form has been drawn from shared genetic legacy.

**I had a hard time answering these questions**

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Alivia Shattuck

March 1, 2019

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As your sitting in a classroom full of people you many or many not know everyone, but each person has their own life story and identity. From their race and gender to their social class and work ethics, we are all put into a category. In the past and even now today the way that black people live are very different. The way you get treated, raised or even the footsteps they have to follow vary by race. In order to understand the way that our lives and life paths are shaped by our social identities, let’s look at Te-Nehisi Coates and Mike Rose, both grew up in a neighborhood where they had to worry about their race as they walked down the street every day and fought to find themselves a future. Although Coates was black and grew up in Baltimore in the 1980s and Rose was white growing up in Los Angeles in the 1950s, they both had their lives changed by their social identities. Coates grew up hearing stories from his family about the challenge he has to face because he is black. However, Rose, had to face similar challenges due to him being white and living in a neighborhood of Hispanics and African Americans. For Coates, he had a fear of walking down the street because he was black. These causes him to feel vulnerable as his social identity has changed the way he lives his life. He lives his life in constant fear and always be on the lookout for safety. When for Rose, he was afraid because he was white. Roses life is shaped by his neighborhood and who stood around him. Coates helps us to explain how he felt as a black person living in the 1980s by stating “As for now, it must be said that the process of washing the disparate tribes white, was not achieved through wine tastings and ice cream socials, but rather through the pillaging of life, liberty, labor and land; through the flaying of backs; the chaining of limbs; the strangling of dissidents; the destruction of families; the rape of mothers; the sale of children; and various other acts meant, first and foremost, to deny you and the right to secure and govern our own bodies”(Page 8) For Coates, growing up as an African American has shaped how he thought of his social identity. He became angry at the fact that people who are black have to be shaped because of their identity.


As Coates grows up living in Baltimore, he came to an understanding of how Americans are shaped based on their identity. He adds “Americans believe in the reality of “race” as a defined, indubitable feature of the natural world.” (page 7). He believes that race is something that naturally taught to be different. The way black people are treated is a way to destroy their body and who they really are. They are taught that they are less than those who are white. Coastes growing up in a black family was exposed to violence and comments. This shaped who he as. As he dedicated his story “Between the World and Me” to his son, he explains that because you are black their will changes as you go throughout your like. Living in America and hearing about the American dream, he comes to his own understanding of the American Dream. The American Dream to him is that people who are black are taught that it is natural to have racist comments towards them and that because of this their bodies where to be destroyed. The American Dream is based on enslavement and our schools are there to fail us and the destruction of the population. Coates explains how “When our elders presented school to us, they did not present it as a place of high learning but as a means of escape from death and penal warehousing. Fully 60 percent of all young black men who drop out of high school will go to jail. This should disgrace the country.” (Page 27). For Coates, he faced fear and violence within the ways school affected him. Schools affect those who were black, and they shaped their life path. Because those who were black did not feel comfortable in school, they convinced them that there was no future ahead of them because of their race.

Even though Mike Rose was white, his social identities shaped his life paths and his life. Rose’s experience was similar but different as he grew up. Rose grew up in a working-class family on Vermont Ave in Los Angeles. He lived in fear as he left his front door. He found a passion for chemistry. In his senior year of high school, he met a role model who helps shape who he was as a person. Jack McFarland was a role model to him on being able to succeed in life. McFarland was able to let Rose see that there is a world outside of Vermont Ave. He explains this by saying “It enabled me to do things in the world. I could browse Bohemian bookstores and Farah call my mysterious Hollywood I could go to the cinema and see if vents through the lens of European directors and most of all I could share an evening talk that talk with Jack McFarland the man I most admired at the time. Knowledge was becoming a bonding agent. Within a year to the Persona of the disaffected Hipster would prove too cynical to alienate to last. Before our time it was new and exciting it provided a critical perspective on society and it allowed me to act as though I were living beyond the limiting boundaries of South Vermont.” (Page 37). Rose believed that after he met McFarland, he could do anything. He was able to override his social identity and persuade what he wants to as he lives his life paths. As Rose had McFarland as a role model, he was able to see that this world has in hold for him.


Rose and Coates both were shaped by their social identities and how they were treated. In Coates story, he was able to teach his son the information he needs to live in a world where blacks are mistreated. He talks about America as if the things they did harm his body in a way he was unable to succeed. For Rose, he was taught that no matter your upbringing with the help of a persuasive adult you can do what you need to succeed.




In class


As a teacher, Jack MacFarland has become a role model for Mike Rose. MacFarland teaches Rose that those dreams you have in your head can become a reality if you really believe in it. He gives him this idea that if you block out your surrounds and believe in what you wanna do those dreams can happen. As Rose’s comes from a working-class family the dreams of going to college was down the drain for him. But as he says to MacFarland “When I finally said, ‘I don’t know”, Macfarland looked down at me- I was seated in his office-and-said,’listen, you can write.'” This helped Rose broaden his horizon that there is a future out there for him. Just because the people around you might be of the working-class with no higher education does not mean that you can make a difference and go to college and earn a degree. MacFarland teaches Rose he can help to open those doors to the upper-middle-class. That does not necessarily mean what money or job you have. It means something bigger. The upper-middle-class is a place where he is not living on Vermont Ave. a place where his dreams cannot be a reality. He wants to get out in the world and be productive and he gets this motivation form, MacFarland, because before he came into Rose’s life dreams were not realities they were thought in his head. By the end of the story, Rose comes to a realization of what the. future has for him by stating “Within a year or two, the persona of the disaffected hipster would prove too cynical, too alienated to last. But for a time it was new and exciting; It provided a critical perspective on society, and it allowed me to act as though I were living beyond the limiting boundaries of South Vermont.”. He says this because before he had MacFarland as a teacher he could only think of this. future within the walls of his street. Now that he has an understanding of the outside world he believes that he can do anything and does not have to follow the footsteps of his family members.


Essay 3 Prewriting pt. 5


As Mike Rose’s time in Voc. Ed. he learned that people surrounding them are all different in many ways. Attending this school has surrounded him with many different people backgrounds and I believe that helped shaped who he is. He came to the understanding that surrounding yourself with people who. are unlike you in one way to identify who you are. As Rose was attending Voc. Ed. he became close with Ken Harvey. In class one day Harvey said, “I just wanna be average”. My understanding of Rose’s answering to Harvey’s statement is that people but into their mind what “average” is. Rose’s definition of average is different than Harvey’s as he states “who wants to be average?”(Page 28) As you sit in a classroom or in the matter of fact anywhere, the person next to you definition of average is different than yours. As Rose becomes close to Harvey, he obtains his reflection on his identity and coverings. Harvey may be a person who inside he does not like his identity and tries to cover it. He makes the statement “I just wanna be average” because he looks at how other people may grow up and who they are and he wants to be just like them. My understanding of this that people look around and see how other people are and form an opinion of average. They then feel as if they are less than those people and they begin to try and cover who they really are. Ta-Nehisi Coates is an African American who would view this situation in a different view. If Rose were viewed Harvey’s statement as if Harvey was black Rose’s answer would not be the same. Rose would think that Harvey wanted to be white because he wanted to be average and those who were black were mistreated and wanted to be the other race.

Essay 3 prewriting pt.3

After reading the beginning of I Just Wanna Be Average and Between the World and Me, I came to the conclusion that these articles are similar in many different ways. In I Just Wanna Be Average, Mike Rose’s parents came to America in the 1920s from Italy. As his parents grew up they lived a lower class life. He explains “My parents contacted a woman named Mrs. Jolly, used my mother’s engagement ring as a down payment.” As they raised their kids, they knew that this was not the life they wanted their children to live. After a couple of years, his father moved to California in hopes about health and his child’s feature. They moved into a new house but however, it was very small. He said, “My father got most of our furniture from a secondhand on the next block; he would tend the store two or three hours as payment on our account.” (page 14) In Between the World and Me, Coates’s parents grew up in a place where they did not feel safe or wanted. However, Coates not give much information about his family. He did talk about how his family grew up knowing that the outside world was harmful to them. In many ways their families are alike. They both grew up living a low-class society and that constant feeling that they do not feel welcomed.

Rose writes a statement saying “developed a picture of human existence that rendered it short and brutish or sad and aimless or long and quiet…. When, years later, I was introduced to humanistic psychologists…, with their visions of self actualization…., it all sounded like a glorious fairy tale, a magical account of a world full of possibility, full of hope and empowerment. Sinbad and Cinderella couldn’t have been more fanciful” (page 18). This quotes shows that  he grew up in a time where the outside world was not the most comfortable so he grew developed a picture of what the human existance is like. He believes that the life he lives is not the life that he sees other people living.

Essay 3 prewriting pt.3

Every February when Coate’s was in school, he learned about the heroes of the  Civil Right Movements. However, he was upset about this. I was not happy that his school showed examples that only relating to black people. The films were dedicated to the glories of beatings on camera. He refers to the films as “The black people in these films seemed to love the worst things in life- love the dogs that rent children apart, the tear gas that clawed at their lungs, the firehoses that tore off their clothes and tumbled them into the streets. They seemed to love the men who raped them, the women who cursed them, love the children who spat on them, the terrorists that bombed them.”(page 32) My understanding of this statement is that he believes that they only focus on the bad that black people had to. go through. When around the US there were those who were black that did not go through the things that some of them did. When Coate’s was not at school, he chose to study Malcolm X. He would listen to his hip-hop lyrics, books, speeches, and other materials. Coate’s looked that Malcolm was a great positive activist against black people. In Coate’s writing, he explains a portrait of Malcolm. He describes it as “The portrait communicated everything I wanted to be- controlled, intelligent, and beyond the fear.” (page 34).In his life, he sees Malcolm as a role model and someone that he can look up to.


Essay 3 prewriting


In the article,  Coates explains how the American Dream was built on the destruction of black bodies. As he speaks throughout the article, he gives many different descriptions of those who were harmed for being black. “And you have seen men in the same uniform pummel Merlene Pinnock, someone’s grandmother on the side of a road, that the police departments of your country have been endowed with the authority to destroy your body.”(P.9) This quote explains how the higher authority is trying to destroy those bodies are black. Another quote that has relevance to the destruction of black bodies is, “… I knew that there was a ritual to a street fight, bylaws, and codes that, in their very need, attended to all the vulnerability of the black teenage bodies.”(P.15) .This shows that teens who are black are more vulnerable to the destruction of their own body.  They know that as they step out of their front door they are more vulnerable compared to others around them.


On page 7, Coates uses the quotes “But race is the child of racism, not the father.”. By this quote, he is responding that race is not something that is new. It is something that has been going on throughout America since the beginning. He states “Americans believe in the reality of the ‘race’ as a defined, indubitable feature of the natural world”(P.7). Race is something that is passed on through generations.  He believes that judgment against race is “natural” to anyone. As he talks throughout the article to his son, he describes that no matter where you go you will either face racism or see it happening. To go with this Coates adds, “But democracy is a forgiving God and America’s heresies-torture, theft, enslavement-are so common among individuals and nations that none can declare themselves immune”(P.6). This quote explains how people who see or are judged for their race are immune to them. Coates whats his reader to understand the racism is something that is not new and people have been facing with it since they came into this country. He also wants people to understand that racism is something that people are immune to. However, in my opinion, I believe that is something that people should be immune to.

Feedback of peer review reflection

For this essay, I was paired up with Doyle and Grace. I was able to read their papers and add comments. I made comments on the information they needed to clarify and things they should add. When it comes to reviewing, I need some help. I do not always say things in a nice way.  I have a hard time finding the key concepts for my work so it is hard to help others for me. When I read my peers writing I look to see if they have the key vocabulary and have defined it, the most important concepts and what the article is about. When I can constructing my comments I read what the writer has around it to see if that sentence or statement fits will in the paper. I try to make suggestions on how they should fix it or what they should add. I believed that peer review is very important. When you are reading your own paper you know what you’re talking about but your peers may be confused. It is good to always have someone else’s opinion. I tried to add more but they were too big. Also, I do not understand why they are blurry.

Reading Process Reflection

When I first printed my article, I wrote down all the paragraph number so that when I was writing my paper and I inserted a quote I could refer back to where I found it. Then I went through the article highlighting important information. Next, I underlined the most important information that was in the text. I then asked questions and made comments on the side of the article when I.had one. As I was reading I made name brackets around people names. Overall I thought that I did OK on annotating. I feel like in other articles I can do much better.